This was such a beautiful read. I felt like I was being taken by the hand a woven through the season of autumn. Thank you for sharing. Also craving doodh jalebi now! It's been a while since I had it!
Lovely read, but you made me hungry with all that food imagery (I also skipped dinner last night and haven't had breakfast yet so this just added to the existing want to venture into the kitchen and find leftover savories to microwave and gobble on).
I paid some attention to the rhymes in both poems and in the second, I wondered if ending it on "fertile soil" would be slightly better. It feels like a softer landing with the expected syntax, and while the futile/fertile rhyme gets misplaced a bit, there is a somewhat near rhyme between soul/whole and soil. Just a thought, try it out if you like. It's always fun to play around with things and see the possibilities.
This was a beautiful read! Thank you! By the way, Im curious about Doodh-Jalebi. Which part of India is this most commonly consumed in? I've heard of Jalebi and Rabri but never doodh-jalebi :)
I hail from central India (M.P.). My town Indore is known for its street food and foodie culture. We have so many dessert and food combos that are unheard of anywhere else in India.
This is a beautiful piece of writing! Autumn is one of the things I miss most about the UK. We do have a change of season here in Australia, but it’s too subtle a shift, it doesn’t quite give me the same sense of reinvention that an English autumn does 🧡
Thank you for taking the time to read Donna! I'm so glad it made you feel something.
I can relate to what you are experiencing now, back in India we didn't see much of fall. But you can sense a subtle nip in the air as September progresses.
Also I've never had doodh jalebi so...I guess I have a good excuse to visit my gramma back home? Though I've never felt attracted to jalebis before. They seem so...sickening, like just a mix of oil and syrup. I don't know.
This was such a beautiful read. I felt like I was being taken by the hand a woven through the season of autumn. Thank you for sharing. Also craving doodh jalebi now! It's been a while since I had it!
Aww... Thank you for reading Habiba! I hope you get to have it soon.😊
Lovely read, but you made me hungry with all that food imagery (I also skipped dinner last night and haven't had breakfast yet so this just added to the existing want to venture into the kitchen and find leftover savories to microwave and gobble on).
I paid some attention to the rhymes in both poems and in the second, I wondered if ending it on "fertile soil" would be slightly better. It feels like a softer landing with the expected syntax, and while the futile/fertile rhyme gets misplaced a bit, there is a somewhat near rhyme between soul/whole and soil. Just a thought, try it out if you like. It's always fun to play around with things and see the possibilities.
Beautiful, Zahra.
Hunting down doodh jalebi with your father sounds very fun, and delicious 💛 now I'm craving cold months and warm sweets!
This was a beautiful read! Thank you! By the way, Im curious about Doodh-Jalebi. Which part of India is this most commonly consumed in? I've heard of Jalebi and Rabri but never doodh-jalebi :)
Thank you for reading Sanobar! 😊
I hail from central India (M.P.). My town Indore is known for its street food and foodie culture. We have so many dessert and food combos that are unheard of anywhere else in India.
This is a wonderful capture of the way seasons and seasonal change inspire and help us better understand ourselves - thank you for sharing!
Thank you for reading Jeffrey!
I'm so grateful to have lived surrounded by nature all this time. It indeed is a blessing.
This is a beautiful piece of writing! Autumn is one of the things I miss most about the UK. We do have a change of season here in Australia, but it’s too subtle a shift, it doesn’t quite give me the same sense of reinvention that an English autumn does 🧡
Thank you for taking the time to read Donna! I'm so glad it made you feel something.
I can relate to what you are experiencing now, back in India we didn't see much of fall. But you can sense a subtle nip in the air as September progresses.
Thank you for reading! I hope you had a fulfilling meal after reading this though, don't want you cursing me on a hungry belly!😝
Ah keen observations you got there.. will try and play around with them rhymes Inshallah. I appreciate you for bringing it to my attention!
Aww thank you Gigi.. there's nothing better than a warm dessert on a cold evening!❤️
Also I've never had doodh jalebi so...I guess I have a good excuse to visit my gramma back home? Though I've never felt attracted to jalebis before. They seem so...sickening, like just a mix of oil and syrup. I don't know.
Please.. don't judge a dessert by it's ingredients or appearances before you try it.
Advice from a sincere sweet tooth!😁